Guest yanG Posted July 25, 2011 Share Posted July 25, 2011 http://soundcloud.com/yan_g/unt061-w-i-p Not sure of the mix, I always want the drums loud, never know when it's too much! Not sure either if the middle part is too long, and the last third probably is, you tell me! Any construtive criticism would be nice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest yanG Posted July 26, 2011 Share Posted July 26, 2011 Thanks for the input, Jonas! Well I'm definitely not aiming at making a breathable track, I like it to be obsessive and compulsive and would rather want people to choke on it , but maybe it's not sick enough then? I could definitely use modulations in the arp speed with corresponding rhythm tweaks... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest iep Posted July 26, 2011 Share Posted July 26, 2011 i heard it a few times yesterday, & agree with Jonas that it is quite full of ideas, which is how i remember most of the yan_G stuff i heard. i have to be in the mood, cos it feels a bit manic, but yeh then it's very enjoyable. there's bits that could be worked out more mayb? i seemed to think "this can be wilder" a few times, but can't remember the specifics. saved this one tho :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ceqn Posted July 26, 2011 Share Posted July 26, 2011 I agree with Jonas on the arp speed being pretty damn fast. It's enjoyable at first but then it becomes a little repetitive. Maybe have it start out fast, then eventually slow down to half that time and have the drums going at the same speed. Maybe it could make for a good... "breakdown"? lol Your drum programming is pretty fantastic. I don't know if it's soundcloud's fault but the snare sounds a little weak to me. Maybe you could beef it up with a second mid range, crunchy snare? Cheers. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest yanG Posted July 28, 2011 Share Posted July 28, 2011 i heard it a few times yesterday, & agree with Jonas that it is quite full of ideas, which is how i remember most of the yan_G stuff i heard. i have to be in the mood, cos it feels a bit manic, but yeh then it's very enjoyable. there's bits that could be worked out more mayb? i seemed to think "this can be wilder" a few times, but can't remember the specifics. saved this one tho :) thanks, i'll go to the wilder side then. it's weird that you both find it "full of ideas" because that must be one of my most repetitive tracks! really didn't expect that comment again! I agree with Jonas on the arp speed being pretty damn fast. It's enjoyable at first but then it becomes a little repetitive. Maybe have it start out fast, then eventually slow down to half that time and have the drums going at the same speed. Maybe it could make for a good... "breakdown"? lol Your drum programming is pretty fantastic. I don't know if it's soundcloud's fault but the snare sounds a little weak to me. Maybe you could beef it up with a second mid range, crunchy snare? Cheers. the snare (actually a rimshot) did sound weak to me too as i was listening with headphones, have to replace it with a proper snare in the wilder parts. thanks for the comment on the programming! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
perunamuusi Posted July 28, 2011 Share Posted July 28, 2011 the middle 3rd is wicked (especially 1:30 ish to 1:50 (when the chimey pads add to it) and onwards is lush).. maybe the 3rd bit could be shortened but i don't think that's particularly necessary. i liked Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest yanG Posted August 20, 2011 Share Posted August 20, 2011 i just updated the file and i think i got the middle part to be "wilder" some changes to the latter part too, any ideas and criticism still welcome! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
foresense Posted August 21, 2011 Share Posted August 21, 2011 the mix sounds good to me. the snare sounds a bit bland, but I'm being picky.. nice melody stuff going on. really liking the smooth change in the sounds you're using, that's the wavetable thing you're doing right? very nice. liking the slowdown near the end... the start is a bit abrupt in comparison. you could draw this out a bit more and be a bit more specific in the melody.. as it is, it's a bit vague what you actually are trying to do. like you're doing a show tune or something, no offense.. just because you seem to be trying a lot of stuff and just knitting them together without any cause, doesn't sound spontanious anymore.. know what I mean? the ending is incredible.. good tune, dunno if I would (dare) change too much at this point. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest yanG Posted August 21, 2011 Share Posted August 21, 2011 the mix sounds good to me. the snare sounds a bit bland, but I'm being picky.. nice melody stuff going on. really liking the smooth change in the sounds you're using, that's the wavetable thing you're doing right? very nice. Thanks, no I'm just tweaking various knobs, sending things to effects, and fading in/out various synths (I'm atcually mostly mixing numerous synths). There might be a wavetable synth somewhere but I don't remember, I used so many oscillators :) liking the slowdown near the end... the start is a bit abrupt in comparison. you could draw this out a bit more and be a bit more specific in the melody.. as it is, it's a bit vague what you actually are trying to do. like you're doing a show tune or something, no offense.. just because you seem to be trying a lot of stuff and just knitting them together without any cause, doesn't sound spontanious anymore.. know what I mean? I know what you mean and I hope you're the only one hearing it that way because it is by no means a show tune, I put as much as I can in my music and I only post tracks that are meaningful to me, where I feel like I'm expressing myself... The only part that lacks sense to me is the tempo drop, I'm not sure I should keep it, I could make it two tracks, because the slowed down part is meaningful to me but the transition isn't. the ending is incredible.. good tune, dunno if I would (dare) change too much at this point. thanks, glad you like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
foresense Posted August 21, 2011 Share Posted August 21, 2011 ye words sound really shit when you're being very specific, I'm not a very good critic in that aspect.. respect Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest yanG Posted August 25, 2011 Share Posted August 25, 2011 well thanks for reviewing anyway :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest naos Posted August 25, 2011 Share Posted August 25, 2011 I've always liked your stuff.. I like your approach to making music. at certain moments, this track sounds a bit chaotic, but in a refreshing kind of way. I would like to hear some structure, but mostly because I'm expecting some kind of experimental thing squeezed into a simplistic form. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Saraband Posted August 26, 2011 Share Posted August 26, 2011 I really like this track. Definitely don't hear the show tune qualities. Interesting arpeggiation. I feel like the switch from the second to third section is somewhat abrupt but that doesn't really bother me. You have alot of interesting textures rolling around on this track. My biggest critique would be that I wish you had a thicker bass section. I can tell you place alot of emphasis on composition and melody but I want your bass to be more defined on this track. This though is just something that I personally like. Enjoyed the composition alot and feel like the pace was smooth. I never really got bored there was always alot to keep my interest. Nice work Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Dissolvedpaul Posted August 27, 2011 Share Posted August 27, 2011 I feel the production and variation are definitely there in this track. It feels different and the fact it's not immediately like other artists out there is a good thing, it's obvious you've strived hard to get your own sound happening and it shows. There's a lot of thought put into the entire thing and interesting sections happening musically. I think the only thing I would say is that maybe you're letting yourself get too concerned about it being repetitive or something. The switch that Saraband mentions is the main part that sticks out as a potential thing to smooth out in this track. You've got production skill and the music is there in this. It's just that sometimes it feels like it's trying too hard to make sure it's totally varied all the way through, instead of just letting it flow. But definite credit for creating something resolutely different, I like it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest yanG Posted August 31, 2011 Share Posted August 31, 2011 I feel the production and variation are definitely there in this track. It feels different and the fact it's not immediately like other artists out there is a good thing, it's obvious you've strived hard to get your own sound happening and it shows. There's a lot of thought put into the entire thing and interesting sections happening musically. I think the only thing I would say is that maybe you're letting yourself get too concerned about it being repetitive or something. The switch that Saraband mentions is the main part that sticks out as a potential thing to smooth out in this track. You've got production skill and the music is there in this. It's just that sometimes it feels like it's trying too hard to make sure it's totally varied all the way through, instead of just letting it flow. But definite credit for creating something resolutely different, I like it. Interesting, thanks. I really like this track. Definitely don't hear the show tune qualities. Interesting arpeggiation. I feel like the switch from the second to third section is somewhat abrupt but that doesn't really bother me. You have alot of interesting textures rolling around on this track. My biggest critique would be that I wish you had a thicker bass section. I can tell you place alot of emphasis on composition and melody but I want your bass to be more defined on this track. This though is just something that I personally like. Enjoyed the composition alot and feel like the pace was smooth. I never really got bored there was always alot to keep my interest. Nice work Thanks, I have to confess I haven't considered the bass at all in this track :) I've always liked your stuff.. I like your approach to making music. at certain moments, this track sounds a bit chaotic, but in a refreshing kind of way. I would like to hear some structure, but mostly because I'm expecting some kind of experimental thing squeezed into a simplistic form. Thanks :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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